Re: Advanced Role-playing Approval Thread

[Dake]

Dake frowned while stroking Katsumaru's feathered head.
"Katsumaru."
"Yes?", the Phoenix replied.
"Is this guy biased, or what?"
"I'd say his hatred of your work comes from the same reason you hate Darkovians."
"That wasn't a good reason, Katsu.", Dake said as quietly as telepathic conversation could go. The sound that followed over the psonic link was a bird's equivalent of an amused snort. Great. Dake thought to himself, Now I have a wisecracking parrot for a familiar. Thankfully Katsumaru couldn't hear that last remark.
"All I'm wondering is how you're going to explain this change of plan to your client."

Katsumaru's words shook Dake. He had never realized that this strange child could be experiencing what Dake had gone through in Darkovia Forest when he was a child, though not as young. Having a small flashback, he walked towards the masked lady, the biased cowboy, and more importantly, the apparently lost kid. He noticed that Wraith was already there. Dipping his hat in a small gesture of acknowledgment, he said to the woman, "Forgive me for my rudeness earlier, but your friend here,", he nodded at Shadz, "Was not up to the task of welcoming me.
"I... have grown sympathetic for this child. If it would be any use, I've been places. I can help him find his parents." Katsumaru promptly flew off Dake's shoulder to inspect the 8-year-old.

[Snake XZ]

Snake awoke groggily to the periodic thump coming from the main bedroom in room 4 where his friend and their guest were sleeping. Snapping his fingers, he finally managed to bring a weak flame to the lone candle in his room and rolled out of the bed. He stood as best he could before his head began to spin, his legs felt weak, and he vomited his lunch onto the floor. After several minutes, he crawled to his bag and began the task of putting on his Ironhide armor and picking up his twin blades. Snake stood weakly, using the wall for support as he opened the door to get downstairs.

"Ugh, what did I drink last night?" he mumbled to himself as he hobbled downstairs. Halfway to the bar, he accidently bumped into a man covered in what looked to be a combination of plate armor and robes. "Sorry." Snake said as he kept on hobbling over to the bar.

Not too bad. I see a few English errors but nothing major. I can understand what you're saying just fine. For improvement, I'd like to see more depth to your post. Before we talk approval, I'm also going to need to see some character interaction. ~Peregrine

[Lady Morri]

Bella had just been dipped into a bad mood by the crowd that had formed around her. She didn't need help, she didn't want help and she wasn't going to accept help. A cold smile lite up her face as she turned her head away from the child and towards the men surrounding her. She felt like a famous actress with men swooning over her, except these people didn't want her, they wanted the child. She had to keep up her polite act though and not act too rudely to the 'helpful' assassins and cowboy. She moved a hand gently across a piece of seemingly loose fabric attached to her right sleeve and a portal opened up behind her. The portal gave a visual of a swirling kingdom of energy with high towers, castles and palaces as far as the eye could see. She smirked a bit and gently patted the child's head in a motherly fashion. It was only natural to feel like the boy was her responsibility, they would be in her kingdom shortly after all.

She stopped petting the boy and concentrated on coming up with an excuse to leave them all behind her and only go into her world with the boy without giving a bad impression of herself. She shifted a bit on her feet and looked around the room before her eyes fell on a duo in another corner of the room, one of them were scanning the crowd in a similar manner that she was. She turned back to the group and smiled then signaled to the other woman scanning the crowd. "I would like your help but this is something I must do alone. Why don't you talk to that woman...she looks suspicious." Even in her ears it sounded like a bad excuse but it would have to work. She picked up the child and perched it on her shoulders then waltzed through the portal to her kingdom. The portal closed the second she was through, not leaving any time for the others to come with her even if they had wanted to.

The lone wolf? Awww, I was totally expecting a quest with the five of you. Well, considering your role-playing skills, if you can tell me where Tim said his character was a ghost (maybe send me a PM or something), I'll approve you. ~Peregrine

~Approved~
Tim sent me a PM explaining the situation. Welcome to the advanced role-playing forum!
~Peregrine

[Dake]

As the woman moved her hand towards her sleeve, Dake unsheathed the massive sword on his back a fourth of the way, releasing a red aura. He wouldn't take any chances, even if she did use conventional weaponry. Instead, she created a portal. Dake released his grip on his sword, instead choosing to check on the throwing knives hidden is his cloak, and the machete sheated on his waist.
"Patience. You'll get to use Magither some other time." Katsumaru said. Dake chose to change the topic. "Anything odd about this portal, Katsumaru?", he inquired
"Can't you feel it? There are high amounts of spiritual energy coming from it."
"The Paths of the Dead...." Dake muttered to himself.
"Not quite. A bit farther into the Spirit World."
"Hmph." Dake then turned to Wraith and Shadz. "Well, that was a waste of words. Shall we continue our search for Padraic? And I only intend to give him a talk. He's been basically stealing money from customers a long time." he added, for Shadz's benefit.

[Snake XZ]

Snake sat down at one of the few vacant chairs at the bar before dropping a sack of gold coins on the table. "Yulgar, here's the pay for the rooms and enough for one of those elixiers that people say work wonders for healing." he whispered as he rubbed his forehead, a headache brewing from the past night.

"Snake, you and Chas really oughta lay off the Frazzleberry smoothies at night. You look absolutely terrible, so this one's on the house." Yulgar chuckled as he slid a glass down the bar and right into Snake's open hand.

"Tell me about it, Chas ended up with some lady from the upper district, I'm still wondering how I'm going to pay off my debts to Padriac if he keeps showering every girl he meets with gifts." Snake replied as he downed the glass in a single gulp and immediatly felt a fiery feeling in his fingers. "Thanks. Keep the extra gold because I have a feeling Chas is gonna get busted by that lady's family."

"Hey, that guy with the pet over there was looking for Padriac earlier, maybe you can help him find Padriac." Yulgar said helpfully as Snake twisted around and eyed the man.

"Yeah, thanks for the tip." Snake said as he put the glass down, walked over to the man, and tapped him on the shoulder. "Hey buddy. I heard you were looking for a gambler named Padriac?" he said in his best deep voice.

Looks good so far. The same comments I made in regard to language in the previous post still apply. I'd like to see two more like this before I approve you. ~Peregrine

[Wraith]

Startled initially, Wraith turned around and brought out his brass knuckles, clutching them with his fists. Before he struck, he quickly realized it wasn't an attacker, but rather, the same man that had bumped into him not too long ago. Considering that, he put the brass knuckles away, and nodded apologetically.

"I am, indeed. I've heard he's infamous around these parts, is he not? Nonetheless, if memory serves correct, he's supposedly a swindler, and a cheater, as I've been informed. Incidentally, I'm supposed to track him, interrogate him, and force him to return the money he cheated everyone out of and cease doing such." Wraith replied. "Wraith, Wraith Arcanus."

Oddly enough, this man seemed trustworthy. Contrary to the belief of the other Assassins, Wraith had an exceptionally good judgement. He could easily tell he seemed nice enough. Speaking again, Wraith asked, "And you are?"

[Snake XZ]

Snake nodded a quick thanks to Wraith as he watched the knuckles vanish, and offered his hand for a shake. "I'm Snake. I was sent out recently by my employer to look for some talented people he needs for a job. My friend and I got sidetracked and got some pretty heavy debts to Padriac. So I've ended up working the odd jobs so we can get out of here and finally get back to some real work." he said in a monotone voice.

Snake felt an odd bond with the man, yet at the same time felt that helping them would come back to bite him later with his employer. He spoke again in a inquisitive tone, "Who are your companions here?"

Still looking good, keep it up. One more post like this one and you're in. ~Peregrine

[Shadz]

Shadz turned toward the new arrivals voice. This...employer sounded interesting. It was hard to tell what was in this mans eyes, his voice offered no help either; he obviously was the type to gather and he probably had some practice with it. Still, he felt compelled to tell him about the company, not to leave him there.

"Howdy there...I'm Shadz." Nodding toward the two assassins, he continued "These two fellows are searching for Padriac, the man who you owe this money to."

"The one with the phoenix on his shoulder is Dake. " Noticing the recognition in the mans eye's, he turned to the other man, "The one who whipped his knuckles atcha' is Wraith."

"Be forewarned though. Be careful what you tell them. They may promise you some things...But there is no telling what they may do in the end" he added, glaring pointedly at Dake."

(NOTE TO PERE/READERS)
1) Look. I know I use two spaces between sentences, it was how I was taught. If you'd kindly just ignore that?
2) Atcha' is slang for "At you" its just how I speak, ingame/RP and in life too.

~Approved~
I said to make another good post to get in. Here is my good post, so here is your approval. In the future though, use double brackets around OOC stuff.
~Peregrine

[Snake XZ]

Snake dropped his hand after he realized that none of the men were goign to return the customary handshake. He proceded to fold his arms over his chest and stood up straighter after Shadz began to speak.

"Thanks for the advice, but I'm certain I can tell if these two are telling the truth or not." he replied after carefully considering his words. "Now, if you three are interested, Padriac is moving from town tonight, and heading towards Mythsong for the annual Poker championships there."

Snake widened his stance and pondered the possible outcomes of his response. "One, he might take offense, but if he does, I'm fairly certain I could take him on. Two, all three of them take offense for no reason and I take them all on. Not what I want in any case. Three, he takes no offense and leaves. That'd be good, leaving me and these two to head towards Mythsong to find Padriac. Four, they all leave and I get stuck here with Chas. I definently DO not want that option, Chas is a becoming a liability to this job." he thought to himself as he waited for Shadz's response.

~Approved~
You seem to be a pretty solid RPer. Welcome to the advanced role-playing forum!
~Peregrine

[Peregrine]

((Sorry that took so long, everyone. Something Xusha said reminded me to check this. See, I'm not a *real* mod, I just have editing powers in the RP forum because of the handbook. Basically, I don't get around to approving people or whatnot until I notice no one else is doing it.))

[Bram]

((*Ahem* ;-;? Been waiting forEVER. No one ever reviewed it.... :c))

[Peregrine]

((Oh, I see what happened there. That was the post that was "under construction", right? It was under construction for a while and I forgot about it. Sorry Bram, I've commented on it now.))

[Bram]

((@Pere Oooohhh yeeaaaa.... Anywho, third submission will be written... Eventually.))

[Lady Morri]

((Okay, my Roleplaying privileges don't seem to extend to the Intermediate Section. Out of curiosity, do I have to apply separately for that section? It seems to contain all the active Roleplays.))

Added you.
-Shadow